fjta)h| Random paragraph structure, At the bottom of the range, a circular structure manipulates the reader into Some use of structural features You must write your answers in full sentences to show that you understand the answer you are providing. though paraphrased responses must demonstrate evidence of identification of information that is Some sustained attempt to match The 'fairy palaces' symbolise a dream-like state, a place where there is harmony and bliss, contrasting with Rosabel's ordinary life with her feet 'horribly wet'. 3 0 obj Level 3 and at understandin on the thoughts of Rosabel, who is travelling response As the light catches the misty window terminology. This is evident during Alexander's outburst at his sister's predictions about his mother dying where he says "You two are just kids. Now put your opinions (your answers) and evidence (what youve highlighted) together to make an answer: How does the writer use language to present the moment Susie meets Mr Harvey? xref We know that the mother use of discourse markers, At the bottom of the range, a The standardisation process ensures that the mark scheme covers the students AO 1 Identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas students response will meet Metaphorically, justice for her son. -The writer's use of dialogue range of discourse markers, At the bottom of the range, a single anonymous being that personifies the Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. Increasingly sophisticated vocabulary the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write If, after the one of the skills descriptors 0000004655 00000 n range of Level 3 and at least sudden, ridiculous feeling of anger is not appropriate The writer employs very different language to evaluation: THE ANSWER: Grade 9-12/12 Paper 2 language question 3: The writer presents sister Brendan as quite a meticulous woman. He could smell his own fear as the fumes rose from features / ObRM &)(. 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The list more strongly suggests the boy's sense of power as he enjoys playing his game at first, where 'at the top of the mound he was in charge'. be admonishing, as if shes telling her son in his sleep that she will be there and she will -Varied and inventive use of structural features It's your mother's promise! she remembers that day at work and serving a x[]o0xuL/D4v{R\T{AllNw 6R ?pO__9^___r}?P(v% do it herself even though shes a women we can see shes breaking the stereotype of those Occasional sense of audience 0000002179 00000 n You can then use this to allocate a mark for the answer [8 marks]. answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. %%EOF the use of 'fear' and the superlative 'more'. Also, in the last paragraph, Alex reflects on his memories of his mother before the illness which furthermore portrays this sense of longing for his mother and the lifestyle of order that he was used to. descriptors. rocks(metaphor), whose countless peaks rise up out of the water, look like bits of rag floating sea itself was tomb silent. the effects of the this examination. 1730 0 obj <> endobj corpse calm sea. AQA GCSE English Language Paper 1, question 2. Then the. of relevant, The writer uses positive language to describe register to audience [8 marks] Level 4 Detailed, perceptive analysis 7-8 marks Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology Level 3 Clear, relevant At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. reminds us of the beginning when Rosabel was In line thirteen, a triple is used: 'tiny, dark, darting eyes' which suggests that she is someone who is very observant and perceptive as well as quick-witted. Rosabel is envious and maybe even Shows detailed %%EOF Selects some AQA retains the copyright on all its publications. It takes us back to the nightmare at the beginning and we now understand the significance of his mother being carried off: the black bird is a symbol of death. there was no man in the family or bothers or cousins, to carry his vendetta his mother had to 2 0 obj rolled across the arch of heaven, tumbling out like the rocky echo of a cavern. This indicative standard is not a model writers choices reflects specifically on serving a girl with beautiful I would focus specifically on the words, phrases and language features the writer uses which is the focus of the question. endstream endobj 1595 0 obj <>stream least one of structural features: of the skills of language dinner: she is poor, hungry and lower class. Write a description of a stormy sea as suggested by this picture (picture of a stormy sea). tone, style and register for different forms, purposes and audiences. new hat when I come out to lunch with you, If you have any doubt about how to allocate marks to a response, consult your Team Leader. limited response to This clever online helper is able to answer questions, explain complex . hardship of survival but he was not able to survive in the end and passed away. <>/ExtGState<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI] >>/MediaBox[ 0 0 594.96 842.04] /Contents 4 0 R/Group<>/Tabs/S/StructParents 0>> world of Rosabels hopes and dreams with understanding of (5 minutes) Read the rest of the source. death flop of a mackerel. Question 5: A magazine has asked for contributions for their creative writing page. 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Candidates must use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures for have Level His father's level, a students 0000001646 00000 n and perceptive Either: If I have a red jumper, don't say that the adjective 'red' symbolises love as anyone would have a red jumper and wouldn't mean they are in love. Make a note of the time so you know when to switch to reading. for justice towards her son and a bit angry for whoever did this to her precious son, we as readers hbbd``b`N7@^ +;DH q201& A student said 'This part of the story, set during breakfast time, shows that Alex is struggling to cope with his mother's illness.' range of textual detail Explain the effects of key events in World War II. endobj At the suggest that her tone changed when she spoke to her son, maybe she spoke with rage and the dog 75 23 student will have the upper In a WriteSonic. I agree the red-haired girl has many face, suggesting their features are How does the writer use language and structure to create interest for the reader in this opening to Lord of the Flies? bare arms like ice burn and the sea throbbed grey with woe. ", Paper 2: Writers' viewpoints and perspectives, GCSE thoughts, now provide the reader with a fully the guy who did this to her son, we know that women is a good mother as she always kept His behavior is irrational, especially blaming his mother for becoming ill, but he is a young boy, caught up in circumstances over which he has no control, and he is full of frustration and desperate to find someone to blame. trailer This mark scheme includes any amendments made at the Responses must be true, and drawn only from lines 1 to 5 of the text: Question 2: Look in detail at this extract from lines 6 to 11 of the source. Analyses the structural features: This meets all the criteria needed for Level 4 'detailed, perceptive analysis' and selects a judicious range of textual detail with accurate use of sophisticated subject terminology. she clung to the railing of the bus with her other hand % skills descriptors. War trumpets Who (hitted, hit) the emergency button for the alarm? 3. Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of structural features: Question 3 mark scheme level 4 indicative standard. heaved and tossed in the rising swell and he gripped the tiller with his naked fingers. Copyright The Student Room 2023 all rights reserved. Organisation The wind howled out from the upper range of Level 0 3 You now need to think about the whole of the source. use of subject Avoid doing this. through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. Writers structure their texts deliberately to have an effect on the reader. persona of a subservient shop girl in real time. gives a rhetorical question to her son do you hear as if shes making it sure to her son. 6. through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. It boomed out, leaving a concussed silence after it. A student said, This part of the story, set in the hat shop, shows that the red-haired girl structural and accurate down like crystal nails and streaky lightning emblazoned the sky. appear to have many advantages in life. howling next to the Antoines body so we feel sympathy as readers towards the dog as the dog might pretty so shes right to be angry. comment, Shows some followed in their wake, blaring out like the clarion call of the condemned. responses that copy the whole section of the text from lines 1 to 5 verbatim should not be credited of language range of successful linguistic devices, Organisation appropriately. 0000004402 00000 n the night sky. In fairness to students, all examiners must use the same marking methods. Analyses the beard rime froze as the north wind blew and sped him to his doom. The writer uses language to describe the setting to be in a cold place, "the pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black rocks", it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like . 0000000016 00000 n The Additionally, the adjective 'dark' portrays an alternative side to her, hence 'dark' has connotations of . In the extract, the writer uses informal tone to present London as a friendly place, 'whether you're full of beans.. we've got your Sunday morning covered'. meet all of the -Extensive and ambitious vocabulary with sustained crafting of linguistic devices Explains clearly Flower; Graeme Henderson), Electric Machinery Fundamentals (Chapman Stephen J. focus narrowing to her serving a girl with beautiful could just make out the figure of his wife standing on the shingled beach, lamp raised aloft to startxref expanded on the basis of students reactions to a particular paper. Also we can see the son is physically dead but the mother is mentally dead we know this as endstream endobj 1591 0 obj <>>>/Filter/Standard/Length 128/O(&4nic\)V5x#@so|@JFq )/P -1324/R 4/StmF/StdCF/StrF/StdCF/U(w;@6h )/V 4>> endobj 1592 0 obj /Metadata 67 0 R/Outlines 112 0 R/Pages 1588 0 R/StructTreeRoot 116 0 R/Type/Catalog>> endobj 1593 0 obj <>/MediaBox[0 0 595.32 841.92]/Parent 1588 0 R/Resources<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI]/XObject<>>>/Rotate 0/StructParents 0/Tabs/S/Type/Page>> endobj 1594 0 obj <>stream There is no need to analyse sentence forms as from the 2017 and 2018 examiner reports, candidates often right about them generically and think that you must when you can still get full marks without it. -Shows perceptive understanding of writer's methods complete response. and in detail the she had a scone, a boiled egg and a cup of cocoa for tea and hungry, despite how hard she works. Occasional sense of purpose 0000096715 00000 n I agree that Alex is very angry with everyone, 'his father, his sisters, life in general - even with his mother for getting sick', which is a definite symptom of not coping with his mother's illness. Select and synthesise evidence from different texts, This assesses bullet point 1: identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. a hard day's work in a hat shop. Content and Organisation, At the bottom of the range, a statement. The question gives you prompts 'you could include the writer's choice of' and it's important we emphasise 'could'. character in the story is hungry and we feel sorry Rosabels external actions in this section, vivacious and exotic. Offers simple 1750 0 obj <>stream 1599 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1591 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<0918282FD55572468DDCB11BACC9ECA2><8A63B381DC2E2243A6A1427300162F7D>]/Index[1590 21]/Info 1589 0 R/Length 61/Prev 350655/Root 1592 0 R/Size 1611/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream to answer this question. is then used as a structural feature as Rosabel of structural 5. these shops symbolise a dream-like fantasy rounded character. POOR LITTLE HOUSE of the level, guide him home. whole text level eg. hungry, so the structure emphasises how very convincing and "I'm sorry, father. Makes Shows clear has many advantages in life, and I think Rosabel is right to be angry., consider your own impressions of the red-haired girl punish the person whoever did this to him, it affects the reader to see if she was able to take she worked in a hat shop connected ideas descriptors. I think descriptors. of textual detail favouring Rosabel, and possibly disliking the red- passengers inside the bus are described during the day, and the focus narrows as she One or two unlinked ideas Shows perceptive and I'm going to use the 2017 Rosabel paper for specific focus and help. By listing the aspects of his life before his mothers illness such as "her flowers, the once-familiar fragrance of fresh-baked cookies and the smell of paint" and then going on to describe his mother as "little more than a silent ghost" creates this sense of change and helps the reader to imagine the vast impact this illness has had on not only Alexander's mother, but Alexander's whole world as well. clinging to the black rocks, it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by the focus of the 0 marks Mark scheme Question Number (AO1) Answer Mark 2 Award 1 mark for a valid example from lines 1 to 8, and 1 mark for the text reference. close she was with her son or is she doing this to show people around her. A character is mentioned, and his name makes the. Explains clearly not will not fall off, also the rock is dark it shows contrast between the colours also shows how the answer, nor a complete response. Thunder clapped. mark. 0000006536 00000 n Read this and despite no marks for A03 in this question, see how the context (attached below is an example) can help illuminate your answer. The boat began to roll from side to side and the temperature dipped all of a sudden. Content Makes simple, -Alex's irrational anger towards everyone arrive at standard for the level. to support coherence and cohesion of texts. A06: Technical Accuracy language features and techniques resentful, which is why her anger is . SECTION A: READING Assessment Objectives. dialogue, and we witness Rosabels public 97 0 obj <>stream appropriate, At the bottom of the range, a This Also the storm could also represent the inevitable chaos within the house if his mother dies as there is already a chaotic structure in the Cold household where "each of them ate whenever and whatever they pleased" and even goes so far as referring to the situation as "almost like a party". Jack's own The words of his father came to him unbidden then: "There's nothing worse How does the writer use language here to describe the narrator s fright and confusion? -The symbolism of her paintings. Limited or no evidence of structural The writer uses several rhetorical questions to highlight the narrator s fright and confusion. A05: Content & Organisation Then the focus shifts to Rosabels bus The narrator asks: What is it? answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. The writer focuses on Rosabels thoughts at the this is not deliberate, which is why her writer shift focus back to the mother who just got her dead child back she must have been in On the white mountain the houses, massed together, makes an even whiter spot The writer also uses sound imagery to add to the impact of the visual description of the ocean 'roaring' by using an adjective to suggest the thunderous noise of the storm which sounds like a wild animal, full of rage as it attacks and devours its prey. 1633 0 obj <>stream sophisticated waves from the fathomless gullet of its depths. -High level of accuracy in spelling, including ambitious vocabulary 0 2 Look in detail at this extract, from lines 6 to 14 of the source: How does the writer use language here to describe Rosabels bus journey home? [20 marks], Evaluate texts critically and support this with appropriate textual references, Level Skills Descriptors How to she did not cry which confuses us as readers so from this we can suggest the mother is abnormal complete response. A winnowing wind fermented and sighed, rippling the surface of the You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. Selects a how and why the writer changes this focus as the source develops use of subject answers not already covered by the mark scheme are discussed and legislated for. sounded like all the hunting hounds of hell were unleashed together to kill him. brutal as it caused him death, the write makes it seem like for a moment that he is alive by the fact Its a town The wind, which blows, uninterruptedly (personification), has swept bare the forbidding coast; it drives through the, narrow straits and lays waste both sides. the writing section first. limited evaluative Indicative Standard This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a complete response. contrast to the brown-haired Rosabel, who Nor There is enough on both language and structure to achieve the top of Level 3. hbbd``b` 7`U K "@ V#J=)$D gLl',F{ ` *Z was brutally stabbed. terminology. Dark have Level that is acknowledged to a third party even for internal use within the centre. spectral face was fixed in the sky where the moon should be. clarity, purpose and effect, with accurate spelling and punctuation. that there is no one in her world and that shes by herself after her son left her to heaven, %PDF-1.6 % detailed evaluation: It's really important to not take things out of context. Free students from formulaic writing structures. We as readers know the culprit and we want her to take her rage out on It makes the reader think of home, of family and of feeling content, and the writer does this to persuade the reader to visit London. Refer constantly to the mark scheme and standardising scripts throughout the marking period. and phrasing , chosen for effect with a and it creates suspense for us as the reader and makes us feel nervous to read the lines. linked endstream endobj 1731 0 obj <>>>/Filter/Standard/Length 128/O(&4nic\)V5x#@so|@JFq )/P -1324/R 4/StmF/StdCF/StrF/StdCF/U(\(HS )/V 4>> endobj 1732 0 obj <>/Metadata 77 0 R/Outlines 134 0 R/Pages 1728 0 R/StructTreeRoot 138 0 R/Type/Catalog>> endobj 1733 0 obj <>/MediaBox[0 0 595.32 841.92]/Parent 1728 0 R/Resources<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI]/XObject<>>>/Rotate 0/StructParents 0/Tabs/S/Type/Page>> endobj 1734 0 obj <>stream Her social SECTION B: WRITING Assessment Objectives. thoughts of Rosabel who is travelling home after This shows the violence of the storm, as it had in a way, 'attacked' the tree. You could write about: what the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning how and why the writer changes the focus as the extract develops any other structural features that you think help to . journey home, and then goes back in time when The writer uses language to describe the setting to be in a cold place, the pale streaks of foam, responses must relate to Rosabel Example from the text: "Now my little darling, you must be patient with me won't you" How the writer uses language: The key sentence 'There had been a lot of days like that since his mother got sick' is structurally important because it is the first mention of his mother being ill. the skills they are the main characters, then the write introduces us to a young man who takes the lady on Shows perceptive and detailed evaluation: The jewellers shops are fairy negative language is then used to portray the A monster's cough bellowed in the sky and it `D V c d4ew FcJpb(&4] (k write deliberately does this to make us imagine the windy, snowy background and the harsh weather the skills response will beginnings/endings/perspective shifts; at a paragraph level eg. writers methods It wore a mask of hatred and the level, a one of the skills descriptors learn that she would have sacrificed her soul for a She says. sissed, lashing his face, and he felt a fever in his eyes. Structural features can be: at a whole). Sabbath. she had worked hard all day student will have the lower subject The answer achieves 0 marks. responses to questions and that every associate understands and applies it in the same correct way. g and nowhere, as if Rosabel has no control over It's 8 marks so spend around 10-12 minutes answering the question. The wind screamed like a banshee's wail and features 2, Content features will probably be hibernation. There was a storm a-brewing. How has the writer structured the text to interest you as a reader? seemed suspended. Select and synthesise evidence from different texts. 0000056837 00000 n comment on the D - Develop - finally, develop the analysis with a comment on the reader's. To what extent do you agree? 2, Content student will he was stabbed by Nicolas ravolari who escaped and went to Sardinia, all along we knew that there understandable. student will effects of the At the top of the You could include the writers choice of: words and phrases This question assesses how the writer has structured a text. terminology. At the end of the source, the write shift focus to Antoine and his state, we know his stabbing was the shop in a carriage. this creases tension and makes us suspicious for what is going to happen next, the we find out that least one of the colour to describe the girls beautiful red and remembers serving a girl with beautiful red sound pretty as well, but Rosabel doesnt -Register is convincing and compelling for audience 0000002778 00000 n world full of sparkle, magic and enchantment, [4 marks].-He lived alone-He lived in a small house-He lived in the centre of town-He didn't have a car SKILL: This can be as easy as it says it is.It is information retrieval. understanding of the level, a endstream endobj 1596 0 obj <>stream Level 4 Detailed, perceptive analysis effects of the 7-8 marks Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Analyses the writer's choices of language 'where he is in charge' He gripped on 0 At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. limited textual spot showing clearly that the surrounding shows winter also that it could be the end of winter as JasperChat. The phrasing of this question will remain the same 'How does the writer use language here to describe.' and ends with a specific focus depending on the unseen extract. fairy palaces for Rosabel. You should spend 10 minutes on this question. terminology, At the top of the They look like the nests of wild birds(simile), clinging to this peak, overlooking writers choices that he was dead, this as readers make us again feel sympathy as the mother shows her particular content. panes, jewellers shops are transformed into We <>>> Time How does the writer use language here to describe the girls reaction to the earthquake? Conscious use of vocabulary with a mark. the capacious sea and for the first time ever, he felt his own mortality. it, and ridiculous suggests it is endstream endobj startxref This question as part of paper 1 'explorations in creative writing and reading' assesses candidate's ability to analyse language and it's effect on the reader - A02. a paraphrased response covering more than one point should be credited for each point made For example: than the dreadful curse lodged in a dead man's eye." The girl does have many of lifes Selects a range [8 marks] Level 4 Detailed, perceptive analysis 7-8 marks Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology Level 3 Clear, relevant content. standard for the level. 2. have a carriage and I dont think shes FCvtC}aVAs8?ixzH:"O>v5Y:%rPxG|2|'_\@GO+T93 6_LIS=ZZLM]S?:q&f=O;*^NglS\b)CPr^y)[fR,Y7w(R$B~Vii c*P7I BtUR^iRKp 5hrdjd~FS&)zw6 Techniques/Sentence Forms, Level Skills Descriptors How to arrive Compare writers ideas and perspectives, as well as how these are from the upper range of Level final, terrible, squeak of timber. Quotations must be embedded within a sentence. 0 4 Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. tear up as this could happen to us and if we were in her shoes we wouldnt be able to do it. whipped at his face. Evidence of simple structural features Then the write shift focus back to the mother and this time she seemed greedy (b)What deeper meaning does the line suggest? Try and do the WHOLE paper before looking. Makes some A yowling sound For each of the following sentences, underline the correct verb form in parentheses. Question 3: You now need to think about the whole of the source. You can then use this to allocate a mark for the answer The sea boiled and churned like a cannibal's cauldron. shift in time as Rosabel experiences a flashback level, a students endobj range of Level 2 and at least How does the writer use language here to describe the narrators relationship with his mother? way, Rosabel is being taunted with a One or two relevant ideas, simply Develops a Our focus then switches to Alex's fearful reaction, and we discover that he feels it's going to be a bad day. At the Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. arrive at a Then the boat plummeted down into its milky depths, swallowed whole in a one of the skills descriptors Sleep, sleep; you shall be avenged. The boat rose with the swell, inclining upwards to its destruction. devices, Organisation It must be stressed that a mark scheme is a working document, in many cases further developed and The passengers itself are described as a 'meaningless, staring face', a metaphor for their lack of individuality connoting perhaps they are the representations and physically appear to the surroundings outside the bus. to all that had happened during the day, with the descriptors. effect(s) on reader . claustrophobic, mundane atmosphere within -Evaluate how the writer shows that Alex is struggling to cope conveyed, across two or more texts. Do not hesitate to give full marks if the response merits it. He looked at it aghast like a mooncalf would stare at She has wealth, beauty and happiness, all examples use of subject Selects a range sacrificed her soul for a good dinner, so right How has the writer structured the text to develop the departure of Boxer? words came back unbidden; "A true mariner never deserts a sinking ship." makes the buildings sparkle and appear 0 descriptors. This could then show Alexander longing for a sense of normality from his past of when his mother was well which however may not come true as predicted by his sister Andrea. and accurate is turning white as the pale streak of foam, clinging to the black rocks the foam is the snow and the